第三讲--翻译症.pptVIP

第三讲 翻译症（1） Translationses / translatorese 翻译症/翻译体/翻译腔 翻译症的表现是译笔拙劣(clumsy)，译者过分受原文的语言形式束缚，结果是，轻则译文不自然、不流畅、生硬(stiff; inflexible)，读者要花费较多的时间才能理解；重则以文晦涩难懂、读者不知所云(inscrutable)。 造成的原因：1、没有理解原文；2、死译，对号入座；3、表述不符合译入语的习惯。 下面我们来具体分析。 1、句子过长（特别是定语过长） I surprised the company by refusing to drink the dark red beverage poured out of a fat bellied bottled neatly dressed in a tight-fitting straw jacket. (讨论译文)当我拒绝喝从一个密封草套精致地装饰的大肚子瓶子里倒出来的深红色饮料时，大家吃了一惊。 改译：这大肚子瓶子是用密封草套精致地装饰着的。当深红色饮料从里面倒出来时，我拒绝喝它，这让大家着实吃了一惊。 Their speeches were dressed up with as much care as though they were parliamentary harangues fashioned to the columns of the daily press. (讨论译文)他们的演说被那么小心翼翼地装扮得像是适合于每日报刊专栏新闻上刊登的议会高谈阔论似的。 改译：他们的演说被小心翼翼地装扮，就像是议会里的高谈阔论，适合于刊登在每日报刊专栏新闻上似的。 Those who judged of his ultimate success by the failure of his first attempt were agreeably disappointed. (讨论译文)那些从他初次尝试遭到失败便断定他的最后结局的人，高兴地失望了。 改译：他初次尝试失败了。但是那些人却据此判断，他最终会取得胜利。因此他们虽然失望，却也有几分高兴。 The study found that non-smoking wives of men who smoke cigarettes face a much greater than normal danger of developing lung cancer. The more cigarettes smoked by the husband, the greater threat faced by his non-smoking wife. (讨论译文)这项研究发现抽烟男子的不抽烟妻子患肺癌的危险比一般人大的多，丈夫抽烟越多，其不抽烟妻子面临的威胁越大。 修改：这项研究表明，妻子不抽烟丈夫抽烟，妻子得肺癌的危险性比一般人大的多。丈夫抽的烟越多，妻子受到的威胁也就越大。 The report noted proposals that eating less fat and more food with whole grains and other fibers can protect against cancer. 译文：这份报告特别提到了少食脂肪，多吃含全面粉和其他纤维素的食物能预防癌症的那些建议。 修改：该报告提到一些建议，主张人们少吃脂肪，多吃全粮食品和其他含纤维素的食物，能预防癌症。 2.过多地使用介词、连词等功能词（汉语中能省就省） Return if Undelivered. 无法投递请退回原处。 Because it is late, I must go now. If you go to my home tomorrow, I will give you a surprise. The inside is so dark that we have to open our eyes wider. 我们过了江，进了车站。我买票，他忙着照看行李。（朱自清《背影》） We entered the railway station after crossing the River. While I was at the booking office buying a ticket, father saw to my luggage. （张培基） We crossed the Yangtze and arrived at the station, where I bought a ticket while he saw to my luggage. （杨宪益） 少壮离家老大回，乡音无改鬓毛衰 When