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作文中考英语写作技巧静安初中培训机构新王牌角色大反转——我当老师评作文作文点评体验：我评我优秀！找回更加优秀的自己！BY Zhang ChenWhat’s your view on setting off firecrackersIt’s a tradition activity for?the?Chinese to set off firecrackers on New?Year’s eve. Every time I am excitinged?to see the beautiful firecrackers.?So as?the last time.?[I couldn’t conceal my excitement at the sight of the beautiful firecrackers.]?However, more and more people?are?against setting off firecrackers because of the serious air pollution. It causes many health problem and people have to wear breathing mask when they go out. I agree with them. Although firecrackers are charming,?[Compared with the charming firecrackers,]?the environment is more important to us. I hope the government must make some rules about setting off firecrackers?as soon as possible. We may also find ways to create environmentally?friendly?firecrackers.文章条理比较清晰，结尾的提议很好。部分句子表达有误，要作修改。By Zhang AoWhat’s Your View on Setting off FirecrackersSetting off firecrackers — one of the most famous Chinese traditional customs, always brings me lots of?marvelous?memories when the Spring Festival is coming.?As far as I am concerned,?although it is noisy to set off firecrackers, the sound still makes me happy and excited.?[Despite the noise, the sound of the firecrakers gives us a great deal of excitement and happiness.]?But in my opinion, nowadays, setting?off firecrackers?is harmful to?the environment as it will?release?plenty of carbon dioxide and other gas which?do harm to?the atmosphere and make the air pollution more and more serious.?[worsen the air pollution.]?I hope we can find a ‘green’ way?to?celebrate the Spring Festival because we have only one earth. (103 words)内容很详细，既有自己认同的方面，也提出了存在的问题，最后给出的建议也与环保话题息息相关。句式丰富，但还可以作些调整让句子表达更地道。By Wu JiaxinWhat’s Your View on Setting off FirecrackersIt’s common knowledge that?firecrackers are?indispensable?in Spring Festival, last year was?no exception. In my opinion, this Chinese custom can bring me a lot of happiness. However, this custom st