2013届高3英语书面表达专题指导.pptVIP

2013届高考英语书面表达专题指导、练讲及习作评析系列资料简介;2013届高考英语书面表达专题指导、练讲及习作评析系列资料简介;2013届高考英语书面表达专题指导、练讲及习作评析系列资料简介;第三部分 2013届高考英语 书面表达考场习作评析 （一）;试题来源： 2012—2013年度 江苏省石庄高级中学 高三年级学情检测一;试题来源：2012—2013年度江苏省石庄高级中学高三年级学情检测一;【考场习作】;⑼How should we cultivate fighting spirit? ⑽To begin with, we should be firmly convinced that everyone is possible to succeed. ⑾What’s more, we shouldn’t be discouraged when we are in trouble. ⑿Actually, at no time should we give up. ⒀Last but not least, it is very important for us to form the habit of finishing things without delaying. ⒁We can succeed if we take measures to fight from now on.;【习作评析】;【习作的亮点】;③习作注意了高级词汇及句型的运用的使用使文章增色不少。如：overcame，be firmly convinced ，Actually, at no time should we give up，without delaying ，Last but not least，form the habit of等等。 ④习作注意运用了变通表达法。比如在表达“遇到挫折”时，作者变动表达为“facing the setback”和“when we are in trouble”。 ⑤习作注意了动词时态的正确运用。如：第一段介绍陈若琳时主要用了一般过去时。说明作者的时态概念比较强。;【习作的缺点】;②要避免汉语式的表达。如：She was born in 1992.12.12 要改成“She was born on December 12, 1992”。 ③某些表达不到位。如：在表达“陈若琳，1992年12月12日生于江苏南通”时就遗漏了“出生地”。 应该表达为“She was born in Nantong, Jiangsu Province, on December 12, 1992”。 “… she achieved two gold medals eventually.” 要表达成“…she won two gold medals at the 2012 London Olympic Games eventually.”;④要避免“画蛇添足”的现象。 如：“Chen Ruo Lin is our pride.”这一句简直就是一句废话。 ⑤习作增加的要点给人的印象是：有点不着边际。 如：⑺Second, we should try our best to achieve our goals from the meaning of fighting spirit and then we will succeed. ⑻Last, we can learn much such as cooperation from fighting. ⒁We can succeed if we take measures to fight from now on.等句子让读者感到似有???凑数”的嫌疑。;【修改后的习作】;【参考答案】