5.句子的有效性讲义.pptVIP

Effectiveness of Sentences 避免啰嗦的词语 避免啰嗦的短语：英语中有很多短语可以用一个词或更简练明确的短语代替。商务写作讲究简练、经济，因此我们在写作中要使用简练明确的词或短语。具体的替换关系见课本65页。 At the present time At this point in time Due to the fact that For the purpose of In spite of the fact that In the amount of In the event of In the near future In the neighborhood of In terms of In the view of the fact that With a view/reference/ regard to Now Because For Even though For If Soon About Regarding Since to 删除重复多余的词 删除重复多余的词：重复多余的词可以是同义词或同义短语的重复使用，也可以是名词或动词带有多余的修饰语。这种错误的避免只需要对词或短语的意义熟知即可。 e.g. The examples shown in figure 2 illustrate letter styles. Figure 2 shows letter styles. e.g. The seminar covers only the fundamental basics. e.g. As a rule, we generally approve all such requests. e.g. The committee cooperated together to settle the issue. e.g. We have begun to export our newly developed products. Wordiness 和redundancy的区别：Wordiness results when a writer uses more words than necessary to convey a meaning. Redundancy, on the other hand, is pointless repetition that result from saying the same thing more than once. Wordiness: a person who is honest; a total of 14 birds; exactly the same; he is the person who…; in the field of economics; a period of 8 days; personally, I think…; refer back; return again; shorter/longer in length; small/large in size; surrounding circumstances; the future to come… Redundant modifier: absolutely essential; completely finished; final outcome; mutual cooperation; totally exhausted; very unique; actual truth of the matter; past history; future plans; usual/habitual custom. 句子的连贯性 句子的连贯性：尽管英语的句子的长度没有明确的限度，但有 一条原则必须坚持，那就是：一个句子要表达一个中心思想。无关的 思想在句子中出现或是句子表达的思想冗长而杂乱，都会使句子失 去连贯性。这类错误的修改需要从两方面来考察：首先检查连词使 用是否正确，错误的连词会使句子失去连贯性；其次检查句意是否杂 乱无章、层次不清，若是，则需要将句子重新改写，必要时可改写成几 句话。 e.g. it is easy for you to do your Christmas shopping, and we offer three Unique catalogs. I certainly appreciate the time you spent with me in our interview last week, and I am enrolling in a computer s