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（长沙北雅）朱礼逵之修改学生雅思作文3IELTS test in USA and India – June 2010 题目： Writing task 2 (an essay) Discuss the issue of media publicity affecting people’s personal lives. Some people think publicity is essential, others think there should be means of controlling publication of private information. What is your opinion? Media publicity including Internet, television, radio, newspaper exerts an influence on the people’s personal lives not only in the work but also in the spare time. I opined that the publicity plays a vital role in our daily life, and that it will bring in some drawbacks. 1，? Media publicities including Internet, television, radio, and newspaper exert enormous influence on the people’s personal lives not only in the work but also in the spare time.一定要加and.雅思阅卷老师很是认为基本的错误是很严重的。 2，? Should是建议的一个非常重要的标志。而系动词是关系判断的一个重要标志。 3，? I opined that the publicity plays a vital role in our daily life, and that it will bring in some drawbacks. 前面的直接的说明了自己的观点，就是publicity是重要的。但是第二个观点句子我没有直接的得到你到底是支持应该还是不应该：means of controlling publication of private information. 应该改成：I opined that the publicity plays a vital role in our daily life, and that the suggestion above should be paid much attention to be supported, while it’s necessary for us not to overlook some special issue. There are some evidences to corroborate that the media publicity is indispensible to our daily life. To begin with, millions of information containing stock exchange price in economics, political matters in news, and the commentary on the latest sports news in the World Cup could be obtained from the publications such as BBC, CNN, Times, Economist, etc.. Secondly, the media reported some news about theft, burglar, murder in order to wary the citizens of protecting their own propensity and lives. Finally, some traffic news on the radio will direct the outing people to elude the peak of the commuter time, traffic congestion and car accidents. 4，? 1, 不错，To begin with, millions of information containing stock exchan