PowerPoint 簡報 - 機械與自動化工程 - 義守大學.ppt

chapter 15 * Economy When it comes to words, more is not usually better. When you use too many words, you may lose the reader – or at least make the reader lose interest. Take the following paragraph, for example. For the purposes of this policy, “sex harassment” may be defined as unsolicited nonreciprocal behavior by an employee who is in a position to control or affect another employee’s job or who uses the power or authority of that position to cause that employee to submit to sexual activity or to fear that he or she would be punished for refusal to submit to such activity. Sexual harassment also includes any employee conduct reasonably interfering with another employee’s work performance by creating an intimidating, hostile, or offensive working environment. It’s easy to get lost in that jungle of words. How effective will that policy be when the clarification is so dense? The following sentence provides another example of uneconomical writing. Parking in the lot adjacent to the building will be restricted by space allocation designation for workers’ vehicles and the four outermost spaces will be reserved for supervisors of the construction crew so employees should make other arrangements for parking during that time frame and consider implementation of vehicular co-transportation. chapter 15 * What should you do instead? First, determine what information in the sentence you want the reader to understand. Then, eliminate any unnecessary phrases or redundancies. Try one of these revisions: Consider carpooling, because parking next to the building is primarily for workers. Because we are designating parking spaces for construction workers, we suggest that you carpool. Weak words You can make your writing clearer by deleting words that don’t add meaning. For example, pay close attention to the following words: actually basically certain definitely different generally given