2013英语专四作文范文(必威体育精装版啊).doc

写作语言 重视语言的表达（实质性的涨分数） There is a growing concern over the students who don’t put too much emphasis on study. Some students always idle away their time, playing cards, drinking, gambling. These problems are really serious. Taking into account all these factors, we can safely come to the conclusion that the students will waste more time if they don’t make good use of it. 分析： 句型：There is a growing concern over ....人们越来越担忧，学术性文章中人称是不怎么常用的 如写成people are very much worried about…就得不到分了，不符合英美的表达习惯 put too much emphasis on ... idle away their time... 消磨时光 句型：Taking into account all these factors, we can safely come to the conclusion that.... （我们完全可以得出…结论，很地道） As a student, busy as I am with my study, I also do many interesting things such as reading novels, writing articles at the two-day weekend. All work no play makes Jack a dull boy. It’s really true ! ...busy as I am with my study... （＝although I am busy with my study得不到分） All work no play makes Jack a dull boy. 只工作，不玩耍，聪明的孩子也变傻。这些词句就向沙漠中的金子闪闪发光，不能不使阅卷人感到欣喜。 实际上，所谓的金子无非是语言的variety，即用词的变化，用句的变化，就语言而论不存在那个词好，那个词不好，那个句子好，那个句子不好的说法。所谓语言漂亮是指语言的变化。 具体现下：词汇第一位，语法第二位。 词汇： 词汇的宽度；即词汇的面，多变化，一定不能出现重复的词。 ２、词汇的难度。 基础差的同学得分：词汇的难度可能作不到，但词汇的宽度可以贯彻写作意识。 第一档：没有词汇概念 第二档：有意识的换掉重复的词 第三档：挑战词汇的难度 句子结构：（语法） 句子结构的精确性； 句子结构的复杂性 句型的开端多变化（种种方式） b 包含从句 （状语从句，定语从句，同位语从句，非谓语动词等） 第一档：没有语法概念，低级错误一大堆 第二档：句子结构没有什么错误，但多为简单句 第三档：努力做复杂句子结构，学会用句型去包装 要改变语言缺乏这一毛病，就要平时积累对同一意思的不同表达法，在写作时善于变化，以下句子均没有任何错误，但b句的表达比a句更优秀。这就是实质性的涨分数 如要表示“使”不要仅靠make; 社会拒绝给妇女以平等的权利。 a)This society still makes women unable to enjoy equal rights. b)Women are still denied equal rights. 这件小事情使我想起了过去的一段经历。 a)The incident made me recall one of my past experiences. b)The incident remained me of one of my past experiences. 如要表达“越来越”，不要只使用more and more： a)More and more students find learning English has become more and more difficult. b)Students in growing numbers find learning has become increasingly difficult. a)More and more teenagers smoke cigarettes in recent years