【读后续写】2021年6月浙江读后续写讲评-第一次打工赚钱 名师教学设计-郭合英.docxVIP

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基于协同效应提升表达能力的读后续写讲评

（以2021年6月浙江读后续写“第一次打工赚钱”为例)

杭州二中树兰高级中学郭合英

读后续写：

Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（长号）.

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb’s-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn’tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome,mydadsaid,Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

注意：

所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome._____

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