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学生书写的作文分析 如何才能写好英语作文，怎样才能提高学生写作能力呢？为解决此问题，我首先在九年级1、2班进行了调查。 1、中下等学生写作中存在的问题及解决办法 （1）.存在的问题 例文（1） My Hometown My hometown is a small countryside town⑧. I didn’t①go back to my hometown since 1992.So I don’t know what’s population④⑥ in it. There has⑦ some hills, a river, and some fields. When I was young, I very liked⑧ to climb the hill near my home. Sometimes I climbed the hill with my classmate② When we arrived at the hill top⑧, we always had race④, because all wanted to know who was first⑥. I also remember when we went to school, we had to pass river⑧. Sometimes we didn’t crossed① the bridge and swimed①.the water. In holiday we could catch the small fish④ in the river. How a good time I had! ⑨ I like my hometown more than the city which⑤ I live, but people here⑩ are very poor. when the children only finish junior middle school, parent② force them to leave school, and go to cities to find work. And that make③ the hometown poorer and poorer. I think I’ll come back ⑩ my hometown to build⑧ it more and more beautiful after finishing university 这篇作文约150字，行文尚属连贯通顺，叙述的事情比较清楚，运用了现在时，过去时，完成时，将来时，写的句子都较长，含有不少主从复合句，但存在大大小小的错误近20处。 ①时态运用不当：（正）haven’t gone, didn’t cross, swim ②名词不注意单复数及意义：（正）classmates , parents ③主谓语不一致：（正） that makes ④冠词漏用或使用不当：（正）the population, had a race, a small fish ⑤定语从句关系代词使用不当：（正）the city where I live ⑥宾语从句语序不当：（正）what the population is, who the first was ⑦误用习惯表达法：（正）there are ⑧生硬按汉语表述：（正）town, liked very much, the top of the hill , cross the river, make it more beautiful ⑨感叹句错误：（正）what a good time we had! ⑩低级错误（笔误）：（正）people there, come back to 在调查中，我们发现，除了以上错误，还存在以下问题： ① 单词拼写错误 如destory(destroy), belive (believe)等。（所举例子括号中为正确表达）易混淆的词，如：parent(present),father(farther) ②词语搭配不当或用词不准确 如：look the book(read the book),look the film(see the film),prefer to seeing the film(prefer to see the film) ③缺少句子成分 A.缺少主语：如“从西安到上海乘火车大约要18个小时。” 误：From Xi’an to Shanghai by train is about 18 hours’ journey. 正：It’s about 18 hours’ journey from Xi’an to shanghai.