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(3) General Implications This kind of wordiness is a general version of the others, but it is harder to spot because it can be so diffuse. Example Redundant: Imagine someone trying to learn the rules for playing the game of chess. Concise: Imagine someone learning the rules of chess. We normally know that learning implies trying, playing a game implies rules, chess is a kind of game. Avoiding Unnecessary Repetition Activity Exercises for Redundancy Revise the following sentences to achieve conciseness. Concentrate on eliminating unnecessary or confusing repetition and redundancy. Example Redundant: Because the circumstances surrounding the cancellation of classes were murky and unclear, the editor of the student newspaper assigned a staff reporter to investigate and file a report on the circumstances. Avoiding Unnecessary Repetition Concise: Because the circumstances leading to the cancellation of classes were unclear, the editor of the student newspaper assigned a staffer to investigate and report the story. In today’s world in the last quarter of the twentieth century, security has become a more compelling goal than social reform. (2) Deadly nightshade is aptly named. It has small white flowers and deep black fruit. The fruit looks like night, and it also looks like death. The fruit does happen to be poisonous, too. Avoiding Unnecessary Repetition (3) The fire that destroyed my apartment also destroyed my books and research notes. Now, with the research for my term paper destroyed, I’ll have to start it all over again from the beginning (4)The disastrous drought was devastating to crops, but the farmers cooperated together to help each other out. (5) In his autobiography of his life, and particularly in his version of the Watergate Scandal, Richard Nixon rehearsed old claims and did not reveal anything new. Avoiding Unnecessary Repetition 3. Simplifying Word Groups and Sentences Activity Simplify the sentences below.