朱自清《荷塘月色》朱纯深译本赏析课件.pptVIP

朱自清《荷塘月色》 朱纯深译本赏析 Moonlight Over the Lotus Pond 《荷塘月色》分析 朱纯深先生在译文《荷塘月色》中的遣词造句力求传达原文的形象美和音乐美,力图从整体效果上追求原文所传达的意 境。赏析片段,见微知著,从原文的部分段落及 其译文的对比中我们可以看出译者字斟句酌,精心选词,使用了大量常见且富于表现力的灵活度很高的小词,运用了各种翻译技巧、句子结构及修辞手法,再现了原文的清新自然的风格,传达了原文的音美、形美和意美。下面将从三个角度简要赏析：语境、措辞、修辞。 荷塘月色 语境角度 文章开篇便是“这几天心里颇不宁静”，文中处处体现这种不宁静的心绪。全文都带有一点淡淡的忧愁，有些寂寞，有些朦胧。怨而不怒、哀而不伤， 所有的感觉都只是淡淡的。 原文：这是一条幽僻的路；白天也少人走，夜晚更加寂寞。荷塘四周，长着许多树，蓊蓊(wěng)郁郁的。路的一旁，是些杨柳，和一些不知道名字的树。没有月光的晚上，这路上阴森森的，有些怕人。今晚却很好，虽然月光也还是淡淡的。 语境角度 朱纯深译文：It is peaceful and secluded here, a place not frequented by pedestrians even in the daytime; now at night, it looks more solitary, in a lush, shady ambience of trees all around the pond. On the side where the path is, there are willows, interlaced with some others whose names I do not know. The foliage, which, in a moon less night, would loom somewhat frighteningly dark, looks very nice tonight, although the moonlight is not more than a thin, greyish veil. 分析： ① Secluded: (of a place)private and quiet；not used or disturbed by other peopleSecluded 恰能表达原文“幽僻”之意，此处更凸显作者内心寂寥之情。 措辞角度 ② Solitary: a solitary person or thing is the only one you can see in a placeSolitary 一 般指人“形单影只”，此时 指“路”的寂寞，以抒发作者 的寂寞之意。 ③ Veil:a covering of very thin transparent material worn, especsially by woman, to protect or hide the face, or as part of the hat, etc. 原文中“月光还是淡淡的”，译为 moonlight is not more than a thin, greyish veil.veil（面纱）一词足显全文朦胧之美，与文章的淡淡的忧愁感情基调相符，即与文章背景语境相一致。 原文：虽然是满月，天上却有一层淡淡的云，所以不能朗照；但我以为这恰是到了好处——酣眠固不可少，小睡也别有风味的。 译文：Although it is a full moon, shining through a film of clouds, the light is not at its brightest; it is, however, just right for me – a profound sleep is indispensable, yet a snatched doze also has a savour of its own. ① film有a very thin layer of something that appears on the surface of something else之意。用“a film of ” 描绘云朦胧的状态十分恰当。 措辞角度 ② “朗照”翻译为“at its brightest”与前文满月相照应。满月的时候月亮是最亮的。 ③ “酣眠”中文含义是熟睡，译者将它翻译为profound sleep而不是heavy sleep,“小睡”翻译为“snatched doze” 而不是nap主要是考量整篇散文的风格。