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秋风清，秋月明,落叶聚还散,寒鸦栖复惊。 Topic International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages? A Poor Essay - The following is a band 5 essay. 　　International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? 　　In my opinion advantages outweight the disadvantages. Firstly, many countries like Egypt or Tailand live from tourism Lots of people work there as a seilsmens or tourist guides. These countries without support of tourists wouldn’t be able to funtcion properly. 　　Secondly, in countries visited by tourists are plenty of places where people just can’t pass because of rare animals or plants. 　　Another thing is that people like traveling and seeing new exotic places. They like lie on the beach or swim in ocean. 　　Furthermore, tourism is now more growing industry highering tousands of people. There are makeing new places to work and to have fun. 　　But on the other hand, people often forget that they aren’t the only beings on the planet. 　　Many tourists are living garbage just anywhere. Some of them wan’t an exotic souvenir so they pay for illegal things like dead or live animals or some sculpture. 　　To sum up I think international traveling is a good thing but people must realise that there is something else besides them. They need to know that flora and fauna needs to be protected. People have to enjoy their holidays but also protect environment. Below is an analysis of this essay. Task Response. 　　The essay question has been copied and used as the introduction (paragraph 1). Once these 34 words are taken off the word count, the response is under length at 194 words and so loses marks. Nevertheless, the topic is addressed and a releva