书面表达之平时积累与高分突破(原文发表于《高中生·高考指导》杂志2012年21期).docVIP

书面表达之平时积累与高分突破 2012年的高考越来越近，在高考前的有限时间里，针对书面表达题型的训练愈发显得重要。在考前的最后时间中，同学们如果能掌握一定的应试对策和技巧，认真训练，进行有针对性的复习和强化记忆，在考场里一定能沉着冷静，在书面表达中获得突破。下面我们就结合两篇学生习作来谈谈书面表达题型的备考。 书面表达典型题（1） Directions： Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 　　 1，简要描述下图内容，并点明主题； 2，联系实际，表达该图给你带来的启示。 注意：1，词数不少于120个； 　　 2，不能使用真实姓名和学校名称 参考词汇：crippled adj. 跛的, 伤残的crutch n. 拐杖, 支柱 It is shown in the picture that two crippled men with one of their legs bound together to see the world while they had left their crutches behind, which indicates that teamwork is vital to achieve a goal, or if any, two heads are better than one. We may draw a conclusion that the co-work and joint efforts is very important for success. Realizing this point will benefit us and our society.For us,teamwork means efficient work and makes us easier to succeed. For our society, it is also a necessity to cultivate the teamwork spirit and establish a supporting system where people can depend on each other in the process of going into a harmonious society. Only in this way should we stand firmly up to face the challenge in the near future. (135words) 教师点评： 该篇书面表达是典型的漫画类写作，要求学生能首先读懂漫画所表达的深层寓意，然后再结合社会实际谈感想，在谈感想时，更合理、更具逻辑性的表述自己的观点是十分重要的。在这篇习作中，学生就很好的表达出了漫画的寓意：即注重团队合作，变不利条件为有利条件。用词恰当；句子结构正确，能适当运用固定句型；要点全；全文结构完整连贯，行文流畅；自己的观点鲜明且合逻辑。很好的完成了预期的写作目的，是属于第五档作文。具体表现为： 词汇方面：bound（蹦着跑（向某方向）拐杖two heads are better than one（两人智慧胜一人），这个谚语用在此处非常切合漫画的含义。 句子结构方面：文章中使用了主语从句：that two crippled men with one of their legs …； 比较状语从句（while）进行对比；宾语从句：that teamwork is vital …； 同位语从句：that the co-work and …；定语从句：where people can depend on each other …；倒装句：Only in this way should we stand firmly…等等，同时文章中的长句表达非常高级，可以看出该学生对英语句式的娴熟掌握！ 全文结构方面：文章的句子很紧凑，本文中虽然并没有出现常见的衔接成分，但是这不影响语义的通顺和表达，全文一气呵成，显示出该学生深厚的英文功底。 学生习作（2） The picture tell us when two crippled men meet each other, they throw their crutches and help each other walk to explore the world. This story showed that when we have trouble, help each other is very important and nece