学术英语 科技文写作 语法与文体错误分析1.pptVIP

Scientific Paper Writing Part I Analysis of Grammatical and Stylistic Errors I. Comma Splice (逗号叠加) False： （1）Technology never exists in vacuum, it is embodied in products, processes, and people. （2）Stevenson’s romance are entertaining, they are full of exciting adventures. II. Choppy Style(文体紊乱) Sample 1: First draft: We have established a communications Systems (CS) Planning Team (1). This team includes user representatives from each of the 12 departments in the Forever-Seal Division（2）.We hold regular meetings to assess state-of-the-art-communications equipment (3). We discuss how new products are being used by other companies (4). At these meetings, The user representatives describe their other future needs (5). They also work out their requirements for the new communication network （6）. Correct one: We have established a communications Systems (CS) Planning Team which includes …division. We hold regular meetings to assess state-of-the-art- communications equipment and to discuss how new products…. At these meetings, the user representatives describe their other future needs and work out their requirements for the new communication network. Exercise: Electric cars must be able to meet the same safety standards that gasoline cars must meet as set up by the Department of Transportation. These standards are derived from an established crash test. In the crash test, the car is propelled against a solid wall at 30 mph. The data obtained from the crash test are analyzed for fuel spillage, fuel system integrity, windshield retention, and zone intrusion. Sample 2: The proposed system is required to alleviate the increase in demand by using the microcomputer as a stand-alone entry system with all the necessary graphics and software capabilities to remove the burden of Data entry from the present system CADDS. Analysis: This is a long inexplicable?sentence. Topic sentence:要求拟建的系统能缓和不得不增加的信息量。 Development：1.方法：去除现有系统CADDS的数据入口负担而达到要求。2. 设备：把微机作为独立入口系统来 完成。这种