语言组织技巧 .docVIP

应试作文的评分标准尽管描述语言不同，但都可以分为内容、组织和语言三个方面还要看语域（主要指语言使用是否符合场合）和格式 内容按照题目提纲扩展即可； 组织除了要注意段与段之间的连贯与衔接之外，还要特别注意考生最容易忽略的句与句之间的逻辑性； 最难提高的是语言，即用词的丰富性和句子的复杂性。 简单句包括S+V（主谓句），S+V+O（主谓宾）， S+V+O+O（主谓宾宾），S+V+O+C（主谓宾宾）补）， S+V+C（主系表） It is impossible for sb. to do sth 如下所示： It is impossible for刚刚毕业的大学生to找到高薪的工作。 college students who have just graduated， “高薪的”，英语里面也没有这样一个形容词放在jobs的前面 to find jobs which can give them a lot of money。 It is impossible for college students who have just graduated to find jobs which can give them a lot of money. 刚刚毕业的大学生 newly-graduated students, 而高薪的工作可以写成 well-paying jobs, well-paid It is impossible for newly-graduated students to find well-paying jobs. 上面一句话拆分成为四句： ①每年，都有很多大学生毕业。 ②他们都想找到工作。 ③这些工作可以给他们很多钱。 ④这是不可能的。 ①Every year, many college students graduate。(SV) ②They all want to find jobs。(SVO) ③These jobs can give them a lot of money。(SVOO) ④This is impossible。(SVC) 修改： 1.第一句话我们将熟悉的many改为heaps and heaps of （一批一批的），这是换词；然后？：from universities；又想到还有独立的学院，再加上and institutes。 Every year, heaps and heaps of college students graduate from universities and institutes。 2.。第二句和第三句可以用定语从句连接起来所以②＋③成为：They all want to find jobs，which can give them a lot of money. 再润色，我们发现give可以改为offer，a lot of money可以改为handsome salaries。利用学过的语法知识我们可以让这个句子更加复杂，给定语从句中加一个插入语：they hope，放在which后面，这样这句话就成为： They all want to find jobs，which they hope can offer them handsome salaries。 3.第四句话也可以和前两句连在一起，这次不采用主从复合句，而采用并列句，因为意思发生转折，故用but连接，而impossible太绝对了，改为hardly possible，于是成为：They all want to find jobs，which they hope can offer them handsome salaries，but this is hardly possible。 Every year, heaps and heaps of college students graduate from universities and institutes. They all want to find jobs，which they hope can offer them handsome salaries，but this is hardly possible。 练习 例一： 国际旅游业创造了很多就业机会。 International tourism has created 二：外出工作让母亲们没法照顾好孩子。 Working outside makes mothers unable to take care of their children. It is unable for mothers to take care of their children because of working out