高中英语教学课件：practical writing浙江省丽水中学 汪润.pptx

Practical Writing浙江省丽水中学 汪 润2023.3.2 2012.2.12 1 假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Tom 上周五邀请你观看了他参加的留学生中文辩论赛，并在获奖后向你征求改进意见。请回复邮件，内容包括： 1.祝贺获奖； 2.提出建议。 注意： 1.词数80词左右； 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 1 假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Tom 上周五邀请你观看了他参加的留学生中文辩论赛，并在获奖后向你征求改进意见。请回复邮件，内容包括： 1.祝贺获奖； 2.提出建议。 注意： 1.词数80词左右； 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 应用文写作分析式评分量规5Cs项目具体内容ABCorrect(4分)文体1文体正确?语用1这是一篇建议信，读者为__1__， 语气要___2___?词汇、语法、标点2标点准确、词汇和语法结构丰富、准确?Complete(5分)格式1格式完整、符合邮件要求?内容4内容完整，____3___为主体，要特别注意___4___?Coherent(3分)句子、段落1语句通顺、段落衔接?语篇2行文连贯、逻辑强、语义场?Clear(2分)卷面2卷面整洁、书写规范、美观?Concise(1分)内容1表达清晰、不啰嗦、不造作；字数符合要求?Note A It’s never known to me before that you are such an excellent debater and such a good Chinese speaker. However, it could be much better if you mind your intonation more, because I felt sometimes your sentences sounded a little bit awkward. Besides, you may as well use some adverbs such as “诚然”.B Firstly, make structures of your sentences simpler, or they would be confusing because we Chinese are less likely to use complex clauses in oral speaking. Secondly, try adding more conjunctions like “dansi” which means “but” in English so that you will speak more logically. Plus, why not quote some Confucianism to make your arguments more powerful and convincing?correct，coherent，complete BFirstly, make structures of your sentences simpler,or they would be confusing because we Chinese are less likely to use complex clauses in oral speaking.Secondly, try adding more conjunctions like “dansi” which means “but” in English, which helps you speak more logically.Plus, why not quote some Confucianism to make your arguments more powerful and convincing?AIt could be much better if you mind your intonation morebecause I felt sometimes your sentences sounded a little bit awkward.Besides, you may as well use some adverbs such as “诚然”. tone BFirstly, make structures of your sentences simpler,or they would be confusing because we Chinese are less likely to use complex clauses in oral speaking.Secondly, tr