雅思高分必读-增强语句表现力的五大王牌.docx

7A版优质实用文档 PAGE 1 PAGE 3 7A版优质实用文档 智课网IELTS备考资料 雅思高分必读增强语句表现力的五大王牌_雅思写作 一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。 1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如： Weak:Thetreesarebare.Thegrassisbrown.Thelandscapeseemsdrab.Revision:Thebrowngrassandbaretreesformadrablandscape.(转换为前置定语) Or:Thelandscape,bareandbrown,beggedforspringgreen.(转换为并列结构作后置定语) 2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如： 1)Weak:Theteammembersaregoodplayers. Revision:Theteammembersplaywell. 2)Weak:Oneworkersplanistheeliminationoftardiness. Revision:Oneworkersplaneliminatestardiness. 3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如： 1)Weak:Thereisnoopportunityforpromotion. Revision:NoopportunityforpromotioneGists. 2)Weak:Herearethebooksyouordered. Revision:Thebooksyouorderedhavearrived. 二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如： 1、Poor:Mysupervisorwentpastmydesk. Better:Mysupervisorsauntered(=walkedslowly)pastmydesk. 2、Poor:Sheisacarefulshopper. Better:Shecomparespricesandquality. 三、尽量运用主动语态。例如： 1、Weak:Theorganizationhasbeensupportedbycharity. Better:Charityhassupportedtheorganization. 2、Weak:Thebiscuitswerestackedonaplate. Better:Motherstackedthebiscuitsonaplate. 四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如： 1、Wordy:Mylittlesisterhasapreferenceforchocolatemilk. Improved:Mylittlesisterpreferschocolatemilk. 2、Wordy:Weareinreceiptofyourletterandintendtofollowyourrecommendations. Improved:Wehavereceivedyourletterandintendedtofollowyourrecommendation. 3、Redundant:Wehadaseriouscrisisatschoolyesterdaywhenourchemistrylaboratorycaughtfire. Improved:Wehadacrisisatschoolyesterdaywhenourchemistrylaboratorycaughtfire. 4、Redundant:MysisterandIboughtthesame,identicaldressindifferentstores. Improved:MysisterandIboughtthesamedressindifferentstores. 五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如： 1、Weak:Theywillnotagreetohisproposalsinanyshapeorform. Improved:Theywillnotagreetoanyofhisproposals. 2、Weak:IneedherfinancialinputbeforeIcanguesstimateoureGpendituresneGtfall. Improved:IneedherfinancialfiguresbeforeIcanestimateoureGpendituresneGtfall.