海淀期末作文讲评16-1-19.pptx

假设你是红星中学高三（1）班的班长李华, 你们班的外教Lisa已经结束本学期的教学工作回到美国，请代表你们班给她写一封邮件。邮件的内容包括： 1. 询问她的近况； 2. 回顾在外教课上的收获； 3. 表达对她的感谢和祝福。 ;Part 1 Beginning（Purpose of writing） 询问Lisa在美国的近况；思念；代表全班表示感谢（引出下文）。;（12分）：结构、要点齐全，语言质量较好，但连贯性稍弱，从一档文降为二档文。;（13分）：要点齐全，语言质量好，条理清晰，虽有个别语言错误，但不影响全文连贯性。;（14分）内容完整，条理清晰、连贯，语言句式较丰富，逻辑清晰，体现出较强的语言运用能力（流畅性稍弱）。;Dear Lisa, How is everything going? I am writing on behalf of my class to send our best wishes to you. It’s been a while since you fisnished your teaching this term and returned to America. Are you enjoying your life with your family? We know you must be, yet we still can’t help thinking about you, for you’ve taught us a lot in your classes. What you led us to do is not only earning English, but also learning to appreciated another culture. The experience you shared with us and your energy in learning will always accompany us. We are thankful for you and the year we spent together. And we hope that you can continue having fun in the teaching career and be healthy forever. We looking forward to your reply! Yours, Li hua;（15分）内容完整，条理清楚、文章整体连贯、流畅，交际得体，语言句式丰富，体现出较强的语言运用能力。; How are you doing recently? I am writing on behalf of my whole class to express our sincere love and appreciation to you. Hope everthing is going on well with you. In the past semester, we were lucky to have you as our teacher. I can still remember you telling jokes and having hun with us. The laughter once filled the room still ringing in my head. I remember you introducing American Literature to us with great passion and even sparks shining in your eyes. With all of us deeply sunk in this marvelous unknown world, you would always wink your eyes and smile contently. Your enthusiasm has served to leave us with a long-lasting love towards not only English but also our life. We really appreciate your love and all the devotion that you’ve put into teaching us. W