江苏新材料作文指导.ppt

学生习作常见错误： 概括内容要点不完整 使用太多细节内容而不是用概括的语言 过多引用原文词句 词数过多 用第一人称而不是第三人称转述 时态错误 Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two hours later, I didn’t catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home. Just then, I saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldn’t believe my ears. “Yes. It’s very important to be patient,” the old man said. “Don’t consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently. I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didn’t move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This made me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish. On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was patience. 学生习作常见错误1: The passage tells us that last Sunday a man went fishing but he didn’t catch any fish in two hours. At this time he saw an old man sitting near him. The man asked the man how to catch fishes. The old man said that you should be patient. 学生习作常见错误2: The story mainly tells us that the writer was fishing and didn’t catch any fish. When he prepared to go back home,he found an old man sitting there and his basket was full of fish. In the end, he caught many fish. 学生习作常见错误3: The story mainly tells us that the writer was fishing but made no achievements and prepared to go back home. While an old man whose basket was full of fish told him that fish is very important to be patient . The author learned to be patient. At last, the author caught fish and realized the secret of success was patience. (共60词) 学生习作常见错误4: The writer tells us that he went fishing bu