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在50 分钟内写出300字左右的作文。具体要求如下：  Some people see education simply as going to schools or colleges, or as a means to secure good jobs; most people view education as a lifelong process. In your opinion, how important is education to a modern adult person? Write a composition of about 300 words on the following topic: Education as a Lifelong Process. 文章切题性 论点明确性 说理透彻性 篇章连贯性 文章切题性 作文任务涉及两个核心概念：终身教育和现代成人。 两个概念之间的关系是：终身教育对现代成年人的重要性。 （1）对抽象概念的加工不深； （2）对概念之间关系的判断有误。 “Education, as a common thing, is taking place all the time at all places. Schools, teachers, books are not necessarily indispensable in education. People receive information and learn things by diverse means.” 把终身教育泛化成教育，全文讨论的是教育的重要性，而不 是终身教育的重要性。 好像抓住了终身教育这个概念，但理解缺乏深度，只是依据 字面意思强调从生至死都要学习， “Education is endless, but life is limited, so education is a lifelong process” 。 作文中对现代成年人的理解也各不一样。有人把 现代成年人泛化成社会人，英文表达时用 everyone，all people, each person， 例如 “In a word, education does a lot of good to children as well as modern adult persons. For everybody, it is a lifelong process which should be persisted in.” 终身教育与现代成人这两个概念之间的关系理解有偏差。 没有按照作文的要求论述现代成人接受终身教育的重要性，而是阐述人、 从生到死该学习什么。 例如： “Briefly, education can be divided into three major processes in one’s life. In the primary process, especially in one’s studying period, a person must study from the basic and simple home education to the systematical school and college studies…The second process for people is to establish career…” 论点明确性 “No one has the exact knowledge of the feelings of meeting death until his life really comes to its end, and this is the very thing he learns at the end of a learning process-life.” 这里作者好像要论述生命的意义，与终身教育的主题并不沾 边。 中心论点与分论点是否明确取决于作者在立意过程中思考问题的清晰度。首先论点要符合命题要求。也 就是说，审题准确是论点明确的必要条件，但不是充分条件，因为即使切题，论点也不一定清楚、明了。 本次作文是命题作文，命题者已对中心论题作了规定，因此作者不需要在多种观点中进行选择之后，再 表明自己的立场。 1. Education is a lifelong process. It can give people another kind of knowledge, which is different from those skills ment