写作技巧点拨系列(六).pptVIP

写作技巧点拨系列(六) 升格作文档次, 打造写作亮点 【核心点拨】 　　四步提升作文档次: 　　要在高考英语作文中得到高分, 考生必须让自己的文章有“亮点”, 做到妙笔生花, 体现出高超的语言驾驭能力和谋篇布局的能力。一篇高考英语作文若能做到“结构紧凑、要点齐全、内容连贯、语言丰富”再加上“亮点频现”, 则必能征服阅卷者, 获得高分。 　　下面我们就以一篇C档考场作文为例, 通过完成每一步后面的升级任务, 来具体体会如何将一篇普通作文升级为最优秀作文。 第1步:清除简单语言错误 升级任务:请将文中的八处错误找出来, 并逐一改正。 (1)第一句中的that去掉, 并在know后面加逗号。 (2)第一句中because of短语去掉of。 (3)第二句中的lasted改为has lasted。 (4)第三句中的dried up改为have dried up。 (5)第四句中的died out改为have died out。 (6)第七句中的a lot改为a lot of。 (7)第九句中的For改为On。 (8)第九句中it is very valuable中的it改为which。 　　第2步:让词语亮丽起来 　　升级任务:请用更高级的词汇替换斜体的单词和 短语。 　　(1)The government has done many things to help the people fight against it. 　　The government ___________________________ ________ to help the people fight against it. takes quick action and effective measures 　　(2)People throughout our country also do a lot of things to help them, for example, give money or water to them. 　　People throughout our country also do ________ ________ to ______ money or water to offer help. whatever they can donate 　　第3步:让句式丰富多变起来 　　升级任务:请根据不同提示表述: 　　中国西南缺雨导致的干旱已持续了数月。 　　(1)because of, shortage, suffer from 　　__________________________________________ ___________________________________________ Because of the shortage of rain for a few months, Southwest China is suffering from severe drought. 　　(2)severe shortage, bring suffering to 　　__________________________________________ _________________________________________ The severe shortage of rain for a few months has brought terrible sufferings to Southwest China. 　　(3)last a few months, cause(现在分词作状语) 　　_________________________________________ _____________________________________________ The severe shortage of rain in Southwest China has lasted a few months, causing terrible sufferings. 　　第4步:巧妙使用连接词 　　升级任务:请在下面的横线上填入恰当的连接词, 使文章更加顺畅。 　　_____________, the severe shortage of water in Southwest China has lasted a few months, causing terrible sufferings to this area. Not only have many rivers and lakes dried up, but also large areas of crops have