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* GUIDED WRITING记叙文 【考例再现】 假设你是红星中学高三（1）班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。 注意： 词数不少于60。 提示词： 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin 【范文展示】 Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating,climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing. The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view. However, when reaching the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter. Afterwards, we put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively. We were tired but happy. （北京2008） 【范文赏析】 ★文体分析 本文体裁为叙事记叙文。作者用第一人称描写了他们班上周从准备春游到春游结束的整个过程，记叙文的六要素交待地非常明确。 ★行文模式 描写时作者采用了“三段式”结构。 第一部分：即第一段，作者交待了背景，描写了春游的准备情况。 第二部分：即第二段，作者以事件发展的时间顺序记叙了整个春游的过程。整段以 “spring outing”为主线，展现了when, who, what, why, how及result。全文思路清晰，描述有序，结构完整紧凑。 第三部分：即第三段，是结尾句。作者谈了个人的感受。 ★佳句集锦 1. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. (此句为简单句，但是高级词汇come up with, such as ．．． 的使用以及三个并列的V-ing形式为此句增色不少。) 2. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view. (使用了while加V-ing形式的结构，可谓简洁凝练。) 3. However, when reaching the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. (过渡词汇：however, such as; 由when引导的省略性的状语从句；be shocked to see使用恰当。) 4. Afterwards, we put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively. （过渡词：Afterwards；高级词汇：put ．．． into ．．．, recycling, non-recycling, respectively。) 5. We were tired but happy.（but表示转折，发挥适当，感情饱满。） 【即学即练】 根据下面报道，用英语以“A traffic accident”为题，写一篇报道。 时间：今天上午11：30（交通高峰期）； 地点：市中心大街第二拐角处； 原因：卡车司机开车前饮酒过量，开车时头晕，驾驶失控撞翻一辆小汽车； 后果：小车司机和一名乘客死亡， 3人重伤；市区交通中断约2小