SAT写作实例修改一.doc

SAT写作实例修改一 　　SAT写作是整个SAT考试的第一部分，要求在25分钟内写完。很多高中生反映写不好SAT作文，得分很低。，供同学们学习和借鉴，希望对准备参加SAT考试的同学有一些帮助。 　　Topic: Teaching something to another person can help you to learn or master a subject or process? 　　Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and assignment below. 　　“If you would thoroughly know anything, teach it to others. One who ceases to learn cannot adequately teach.”- Tryon Edwards, Dictionary of Thoughts Assignment: Do you think that teaching something to another person can help you to learn or master a subject or process? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experiences, or observations. 本段评点 这一段话虽然立刻表明了作者自己的立场，但是内容不饱满，大多叙述是重复和多余的。比如，It means 这一句完全是多余的。Tryon Edwards说的话本来很明白，浅显，不用再解释一遍。或者，可以说自己的那句解释，但是不用引用Tryon Edwards的那句话。 学生习作（第二段） 语言修改 At the age of fifteen, I was a student of senior one[2]. Because I always got high scores in mathematics, physics and English, my class teacher arranged a student who did not get high scores in mathematics, physics and English and she wanted me to help the student improve her grades. After class, she often asked me some questions. I explained them patiently to her. However, when I taught her the lessons, I surprisingly found that I, myself, also had some obscure ideas of some points. In order to make both my deskmate and me clearly, I reviewed my book, went to the teachers’ office to ask my teacher and put the question to my classmates.[3] Thus, I comprehensively mastered the knowledge and managed to tell it to my deskmate. During my teaching days, not only my deskmate but also I increased the test scores. At the age of fifteen, I was a senior middle school student. Because I always scored [4]high in mathematics, physics and English, my teacher arranged for me to help a student who did not score so high in these classes. After class, she often asked me some questions. I expla